I will critique them
I will critique them
@Rosellia Teh Hybrid I like the concept of this level. The way the page originally builds itself up as a safe level, only to surpass expectations is a pretty interesting detail!
The level itself is pretty decent. I like the struggle for control between Mother Nature and the Other Mind. The idea that the level was meant to be safe, but isn't due to it being corrupted by an outside presence is interesting.
I think this page needs some clean up, as it contains references to the game master (a wikidot entity). Otherwise it's a pretty good page with an interesting concept.
@ABackroomsExplorer I think this page is alright, although I'm not a big fan of the name. Other than that the level is pretty average. The page isn't grand nor impressive but it still does a decent job as a page for the wiki.
I think adding more information like you mentioned is a good idea. Otherwise it's a fine level.
Corrupt
Level 8062
Those are my pages... i am good with logs and describing but my ideas are. C R A P.
Feel free to criticize the life out of it.
@Mg corrupt I'll get to your pages soon
Ok.
@Mg corrupt I had to leave for a bit, sorry. Anyway, I'm here now, so here are my thoughts:
Corrupt: I think this entity is pretty good. I don't usually like these kinds of entities, but you pulled it off pretty well. I didn't get some of the story around this entity, but that's not really a big problem. Also I can relate, I too go into a blinded rage at the sight of a partygoer.
Level 8062: This level is pretty short, and there isn't much of a description. The log adds more to the page, so I think it's pretty nice. You forgot to bold one instance of "Wanderer", but otherwise there are no grammatical or formatting issues.
Both of your pages set up a short albeit interesting story. Your writing is pretty good. Otherwise I don't have much else to say
I'm probably not gonna be very active on this thread so I apologize if responses take a long time.
Waw.
Np.
You did an excellent job on this page. The page is very well written. Deadzone pages usually fall flat but you utilized it very well!
The page has an incredibly interesting narrative. I'm not to familiar on your canon but from what I have seen, it is very well formulated. The way you stylized and wrote the page is great as well.
Honestly, I find it difficult to put it into words but this level is great. Keep it up!
What do you think?