I will critique them
I will critique them
Oh sorry, I think I messed up the phrasing. The page has no issues with grammar as far as I could tell. I'll fix this right now
This one maybe, not my proudest creation but it was fairly nice to write
Nickname Undetermined
Level 55
Level 352
Level 366
C.P.A.
Crimson Wing
Level 210
All I could think of
I'll be back in a bit
@OGominho This is a good entity. The writing and grammar are great. This entity is a very good mind screw; Even though they can't hurt you, they would make you absolutely make you doubt your sanity. It's an entity that plays off your mental health rather than attacking you and I think it's actually more unnerving that way. It definitely isn't your absolute best work, but it is still a very high quality page.
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Nickname Undetermined: A good page. I like some of the information provided. Otherwise not much to say here.
Level 55: I'm not really sure what to say for this one. It's not bad but I definitely agree that it ranks the lowest out of all your pages. I'm a bit confused on how the Crimson Wing got their hands on a nuke. I think there is some more stuff to this page I don't quite understand, so I might look more into this later.
Level 352: Again, not much to say about this one. It seems to be a pretty good page and I couldn't really find much to dislike or like in it. The group inhabiting it is far more interesting than the level itself.
Level 366: The prisoner is an interesting addition and the concept of the level is pretty freaky. The page is pretty short but it doesn't feel incomplete at all. I think Crimson's comment describes my thoughts on the level pretty well. Good page.
C.P.A: Good page. I like the group's description and how Kee Ellis is set up as a character. I think the Vigenere cipher at the bottom is a nice touch (although I'm still trying to decipher it). Good group and good page.
Crimson Wing: I think this page is decent. Nothing exceptional, but still good. The group itself isn't as interesting as the C.P.A although I still think it was handled pretty well.
Level 210: I like the feel and concept of this level. The winter ghosts are interesting entities and the zverikals don't fall too far behind (although I think there may be some size inconsistencies between the other pages they are mentioned in and Level 210).
Well, That's it. Overall you are a good writer. Even if your pages have some flaws they are still usually interesting and good reads.
@Xboy1 Sorry for leaving you high and dry for a bit there. Here is my actual response.
Level 264: I like painting concept, although I feel it has been done before (might need to do some more reading to verify this) . For your first level, it's very clean and I think you did well.
Level 1001: I don't have much to say on this one. Most of the sections are pretty average aside from The Void which I think is frightening due to how little is known about it and how alien it is. Otherwise it's a decent level.
Level 2999: This page isn't too bad. Although I'm not too big of a fan of this level's concept I think you wrote it pretty well. Not much else to note here.
Lurkers: These seem very similar to smilers to be honest. I think this entity needs more features that distinguish it from smilers.
After taking a look at your pages, I think you're a decent writer. Eventually I'm sure that in due time you'll become pretty good at writing pages. Only time will tell.
This is a good thread, and Crim approve this thread.
I feel the need to contribute, so if you wish to review my page, then you can check The Great Cavern of Altera or anything else in the Crimsonverse page.
Thank you in advance, and good luck!
What do you think?